Ah... I did it. I got the working draft done on time. I was working so hard on Devon for a whole week and started thinking that I was writing too much of him into the scrīpt. Then I felt like I was thickening the beginning too much, and I lost all sense of pace. So I printed the whole thing out, biked over to the Bay St. Mall, and sat for 2 hours reading through it and marking the damn thing up and down.
That allowed me to get much more in tune with the pacing of the film and the characters' motivations. Devon's objectives are so much clearer now. I need to fine tune Clay a little more, but basically Devon wants to show his big brother that he can do something right, and Clay's letting him do it, foolishly so. That's when Devon screws up and kills Ronnie, and all goes to hell.
Jamie's still a problem for me, but I think I have her figured out until the very end. The simple thing would be to kill her, but I don't want it to be like that. I left it with an ending where I don't explain her feelings, but I just show the results of Clay's actions, which may be enough.
Now I just have to wait to hear back from all the folks.
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